Fixin'.

1. "You wouldn't laugh at a funeral. You shouldn't use your phone in class."
-These sentences aren't really related enough, so to show that they are supposed to be connected thoughts I threw in a semicolon.
"You wouldn't laugh at a funeral; you shouldn't use your phone in class."

2. "Although many students can't put their cell phones down, they shoulld be banned from class because it negatively effects grades, is a great distraction and it wastes time and money."
-Dear Affects/Effects, I always have a problem with you! TO AFFECT something, THE EFFECTS of something. Could you be more confusing.
"Although many students can't put their cell phones down, they shoulld be banned from class because it negatively affects grades, is a great distraction and it wastes time and money."

3. "Although many students can't put their cell phones down, they should be banned from class because it negatively effects grades, is a great distraction and it wastes time and money."
-My structure isn't parallel, "IT does this, this and IT does this. I took out the second IT.
"Although many students can't put their cell phones down, they should be banned from class because it negatively effects grades, is a great distraction and wastes time and money."

4. "I spent the majority of my time in Psych 111 last semester with my face in my smartphone."
-I used an abbreviation here, changin' it!
"I spent the majority of my time in Psychology 111 last semester with my face in my smartphone."

5. "I can't say I met a cute boy in the process of interacting with those around me, but I made friends, I got a really good grade, learned so much more than I thought possible, and I used my time wisely."
-Parallel structure, again!
"I can't say I met a cute boy in the process of interacting with those around me, but I made friends, I got a really good grade, I learned so much more than I thought possible, and I used my time wisely."

I really like peer reviews because I get to hear the opinions or real readers, BYU students. BUT! Because we didn't have much time for each paper, we could only get to the stuff that would help improve our essays, in other words, we could only say the bad things. Which is good for no ones ego. So with more time, I would love to do this again!

Fun with Fallacies. (And some EPL)

The first thing that pops into my head when I think of fallacies is Abbott and Costello's famous "Who's on first?" sketch. The fallacy that this is a great example of is called equivocation. This little skit has always been absolutely hilarious to me, even after seeing it for the 500th time. This is a very humorous use of the fallacy. If you haven't seen/heard it yet, and you want a laugh, I highly recommend you read it. DO it!

Abbott: I say, Who’s on first, What’s on second, and I Don’t Know’s on third

Costello: Well then who is on first?

Abbott: Yes.

Costello: I mean the fellow’s name.

Abbott: Who.

Costello: The guy on first.

Abbott: Who.

Costello: The first baseman.

Abbott: Who!

Costello: The guy playing first base.

Abbott: Who is on first.

Costello: I’m asking you who’s on first!

Abbott: That’s the man’s name.

Costello: That’s whose name?

Abbott: Yeah.

Costello: Well go ahead and tell me.

Abbott: That’s it.

Costello: That’s who?

Abbott: Yeah.

Its just continues to go on and on with the hilariousness. This is a strong example of this fallacy because the actual names of the players just so happen to be interrogatory words as well. Hence, one term with two definitions that causes an extreme level of miscommunication. And entertainment :)

EPL! (ethos, pathos, logos)

Ethos!

Stating that he's a clergyman may give him a little bit of standing and cause trust.

 "First, I think it a right thing for every clergyman to set the example of matrimony in his parish."

Just by saying, "My dear cousin," he makes it more personal. If someone were to address me in such a personal manner it might cause me to trust them more.

Pathos!

Mr. Collins attacks emotionally here, very harshly I might add. This statement would most definitely evoke emotion and really cause her to think, "oh dear, he might be right."

"Consider that it is by no means certain that another offer of marriage may be made to you. You cannot be serious in your rejection."

His choice of words here is very flattering and can emotionally get to her. It sounds like a cheesy line to me, but can definitely draw out an "Awwwwww!"

"For, as almost as soon as I entered the house, I singled you out as the companion of my future life! But before I am run away by my feelings on this subject, perhaps it would be advisable for me to state my reasons for marrying."

Logos!

Here, Mr. Collins appeals logically by saying why he has chosen her. It can also be an emotional angle when he speaks on his affections.

"My dear cousin, being, as I am, to inherit all this estate after the death of your father, I could not satisfy myself without resolving to choose a wife from among his daughters. And now nothing remains, but to assure you, in the most animated language, of the violence of my affections!?

He explains here that she fits the criteria asked by his patroness, so she must be the logical choice.

"And your wit and vivacity, I think, must be acceptable to her, when tempered with the silence and respect which her rank will inevitably excite."